Written by Luh Suweni (sayhitomehere.blogspot.com)
Topic sentence :
1. The man who brought a sign “FREE HUGS” along
the street was very brave.
Major supporting sentence
:
1. He was put the sign above of his head to the
people.
Minor supporting sentence :
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People were just
staring at him and no one gave him hug anymore
·
An old lady came
to him and for the first time gave him a hug and people came to
him and make such a gathering to give a hug too.
2. The important thing that we could see that was
happy feeling.
·
Happy feeling
makes everything that we faced become easier and less of pressure
·
He made the campaign
because he felt sad and alone.
3. That campaign was banned by the police because
they thought that the man was disturbing the citizen.
·
He asked people’s support.
·
He made a
petition to get 10.000 signatures from the citizen and the target reached.
·
Give a sign in
petition means that the people do support the campaign.
Concluding sentence :
1.
The point is, a
hug is the simplest how to cherish people near you because human all the same,
we are all the same.
Comment : I think the writing is good. She used
appropriate grammar. She wrote it in structured. in conclusion, this writing is good.
